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It’s darker here than anywhere in my life I could be pricked in bittersweet rose gardens My tongue could be caught on rough salt beauty ocean waves I could bathe ...

airy ending, but it fits. when i saw this poem was by you i yelled "stop writing so much!", but just because i'm not writing anything. jealous, i suppose. i ...

very good. it's delicate at first, and then takes on a more angry tone. it reflects her life well, though i suppose it could suit anyone. i adored the ending...absoultely ...

She had to go you know. --she had a to go, you know With stronger hues, Having got back the lent hues, replace a "hues" with "colors" or something otherwise..wow. ...

i don't really care about the subject of the poem because that isn't what i'm here for. i'm here to tell you that i'd like to see more poetic language ...

awkward lines: a sun on broken sea and it is no beguile. this paragraph is useless and redundant: go laugh it up i want you to please do so i ...

mine were the hands that held you down, that drowned you in a sea of night – mine were the hands that held you close, and let them hurt you. ...

whoa. i did not understand a word you said. well, most of it at least. my brain hurts. Old sketchbooks no longer devour birthing landscapes, cloud notes or a resting ...

it took me a while to understand it, but when i did i only had praise for it. i apologize for the crappy critique, but can only beg you to ...

the poem had beautiful imgagery, and the way you put words together...wow. but I was dizzy, and your pain left me breathless. but? why but? is it contridicting something? if ...

haha. cute, funny, waste of space...I like it.

yeah, i think it's water. not that bad. could cut out a few useless lines, though

ok, this is wonderful. it just needs a bit trimming around the edges, i think. i'll try my best. first paragraph - you say six billion too much. get a ...

um...stop capatilzing respect. and you killed the rhythm for the sake of the rhyme. NEVER do that. go for rhythm first. it's very...choppy and awkward. still, you could make somthing ...

this was short, sweet and perfect. i loved the ending. i apologize, as i am usually a rather...or sort of...thorough critiquer, but this is so...good. fixédness *nods in understanding* great, ...